I have to say Sapph, this is a remarkably well written chapter. You have a talent for imagery, the creates a clear vision in the reader's head. Your story is unique and engaging, and I have no clue what those others meant, because your characterizations of the brothers is spot on. You definitely put the Supernatural novelizations to shame. As for errors I didn't see anything major, nothing to worry about- I think they would be more of a personal preference than truly grammatical. Fantastic job!
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Date: 2010-06-14 12:53 pm (UTC)